Reply To: Tis the season to explode the atmosphere
@angelastic neat ideas. I’m not sure about implying that it’s not the real Santa though. It seems a little too random to just throw in without more backstory\explanation. Maybe that could be done with visuals, but it’d be best if the audio stood well on its own. I’d be more ok with it as ambiguous though, or just as that the elves are losing faith in Santa.
even the elves doubt that I’m Santa?
even the elves have doubts in Santa?
even the elves lost faith in Santa?
I like the ‘on my knee’ idea, though maybe change ‘awkward’ to ‘frightened’ for increased sinister-ness :).
a little less frightened on my knee?
Also, I think I like the original line ‘if you could find some way to be’
By the way, should it be: HoHo, and I’m so into you? It seems less awkward rhythwise to shove the HoHo just before the line than to replace ‘and’ with it.
ETA: We could just go back to ‘crazy’ if it’s too difficult to find a suitably fitting and ‘sinister’ replacement. ‘even my elves think that i’m crazy’?