Reply To: Tis the season to explode the atmosphere
I was thinking it’d be cool to say something about even Santa wanting to be naughty sometimes.
I don’t really like the jolly line, it makes him seem not creepy enough. I preferred ‘even the elves think that I’m Santa’ or something incorporating robgonzo’s idea, ‘but you don’t believe in me’ (so maybe:
Ho Ho, I’m so into you
but you don’t believe in me.
Even the elves don’t think I’m Santa,
I’m not surprised that you agree,
but if you could look beyond and be [okay, this line could do with being a little less awkward… or we could leave these lines as in the original]
a little less awkward on my knee
You’d see the voices that control me from inside my sled
Say I shouldn’t coal you yet…
)
ETA:
Also, during my drive home, I came to the conclusion that replacing every single word with ‘pants’ would be hilarious.
Is that ever not hilarious?
I’m not sure it’d scan, though. 😉