Reply To: My half ass unrecorded Song Fu 2 attempt
definitely sample the movie. also maybe some of the more recognizable sound effects here and there would be indicated.
i guess with songs the structure of individual lines is more flexible in that you can extend syllables and so on to make them all fit, but that line, "Watch out for your past self, don't go higher!", seems like it might be a few syllables long. maybe "avoid your past self"? but it's probably not necessary.
whether the rhyming across verses will work would have a lot to do with how, specifically, it's sung, and i can't really go from printed lyrics to any sort of musical implementation thereof in my head. this also means it's hard for me to say how good or bad they are as lyrics. my gut feeling, though, is that there's something interesting there, inasmuch as any dance craze song can be interesting.