Reply To: JoCoLoCo 2
Looks good, there are as had been said somethings that need to be worked on. One thing that jumped out at me was “take a train from Washington to Ohio”. JoCo was using that as one of the many things that Europeans are meant to do. If I am right cross country trains aren’t all that popular in America. I was thinking maybe something like “Take a Road Trip from ?Utah? to Ohio” which I think is a better cultural stereotype. This song doesn’t have to be entirely accurate, we don’t have too much cheese in the whole of Europe it is just what people think is there without having been (me not having been to America it is basically what I think it is like in America that the song should be about).
Otherwise the only thing which doesn’t sit well with me is the world war 3 reference. Although I am not 100″% on an alternative. Maybe it should be something we invented which had made American society what it is or the fact that lots of Americans are immigrants from the British Isles. However I can not think of anything that fits the music.